The sound is very unexact! Pay more attention to the rythm. The song sounds like in a dj-mix, because you use too many samples. Try to choose a lead, some pads in the background, a bass, drums and combine them in a interesting way.

First intro, then build-up, brake, main lead, build-down, outro. (I'm not an expert in song building, maybe there are more elements )

So try, try, try and you will become better.

Greez

Fabian

Interesting.

djFABE is right about track construction. And if you don't know what he means the only thing you can do is listen to many good songs and find out. you also should avoid clicks between the samples by using fade in fade out...
watch out for your peakmeter. i hear some overmodulation...

you are on your way... but please pay a little more attention and try to be more accurate. some samples don't seem to be exactly on the beat.

First Thx u for comment.

djFABE I am not an expert in ths kind of songs, But this is my creation, can do this can do that! this is my option and I LIKED IT! Thx for the critisism everyon listen and understans its own way!

eipast I will try to do the Video maybe then u will understand, Now I will be on holiday :)

thx u

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