Hello
do you become absorbed in the first chords?, very beautiful indeed
But must now build a melody that accompanies those chords,
you spend a little more time
good start
datamix
This is a sweet tune, with wonderful, melodic chords. However, I agree with many of the comments from datamix. Perhaps an earlier entry with a melody? Personally, I am not in the business of actually "criticizing" another musician's work, but please take my observations as a mere suggestion.
The overall body of this piece has a wealth of potential; based upon the opening bars,,,