Wicked riffing, you picked some cool guitar parts which certainly added a different dimennsion to the song.
The guitar part in the original that you introduced at 0:18 added some great tension which I really liked. You dropped it to work in the lead parts in the new version, might have been interesting to leave it in and work the lead guitars around it. Again, only my preference, I like what you did very much and did not expect you to rework the song based on my opinion, escpecially so quickly.
A really interesting song, I love that you are exploring different avenues.
What the hell is this??? Yes, I am a rock fan, but for my ears this is a completely chaotic style! Sorry, I don't like it, it is a strange mixture. But the sound is really good. So I give you ***
Very interesting track. So glad you decided to try something different and explore. For me, this is a little busy. The concept is there, but I think there may be just a littlle over instrumentation (if there is such a phrase) here...where you bring everything in at 0:43. Sometimes, especially with Rock, less is more. I like what you've done with this piece, Indie. My forte is Jazz, but I love all types of music and Rock is something that I listen to often.
Keep plugging away with this and experiementing. So proud of you.